Twin Portraits


Copyright 2013, Janet M. Webb

Friday Fictioneers for February 14, 2014

94 words

Lana squeezes around knots of conversationalists clogging the gallery. Unimpressed with the collection, she begins weaving her way to the exit when a portrait catches her eye.

Lana hasn’t looked at a single picture of her twin since Tara died. She wasn’t aware Tara had known the artist. Yet, from the canvas, her twin’s half-amused smile stares back.

“Lana! Finally, we meet.” Lana turns to see the artist standing behind her. “John’s twin,” he states, gesturing to the neighboring portrait. Lana had forgotten that two twins were killed in the car accident that night.

40 thoughts on “Twin Portraits

  1. A good story with an exceptional twist.

  2. Marie,
    that’s quite a twist, with double twins. What a way for them to meet. Hopefully, they can get to know each other better. 🙂

  3. What a unique story… this leading to a romance? 🙂

  4. Liz Young says:

    the twin theme makes this story unique.

  5. atrm61 says:

    Oh a double twist!Original take and I loved it 🙂

  6. Very clever. And very moving. One can imagine the turmoil she would be experiencing.

  7. Helena Hann-Basquiat says:

    Yikes… and the body count gets higher!

  8. Jan Brown says:

    I like your comment explaining hoe you wrote the ending. Often, our characters lead us through the story.

  9. K.Z. says:

    this looks like a wonderful start to a new romance. 🙂 maybe in the end, their twins would be happy knowing that they had brought the two together. great story. 🙂

    • storydivamg says:

      I love that two different readers have mentioned a budding romance. Originally, the first paragraph discussed a relationship my character was already in. After I nixed that part, I never thought about setting her up with the artist, but that’s the beauty of flash fiction. The details really are up to the reader. 🙂

  10. A good story that was well-done. Good surprise ending!

  11. loved this! Very good double-twin-twist that.

  12. Interesting. A rare event described in a subtle and beautiful way.

  13. vbholmes says:

    Must be fate–the fact that she even attended the show, then found the portrait of her sister, then finding out the artist is the twin of the other victim. Yes, there are certainly hints of something more to come. Good story..

  14. Killer ending, literally. And the story just kept getting deeper and deeper and more twisted, holding my attention totally. Well done. Ron

  15. rgayer55 says:

    So much for doing a Doublemint gum commercial together. I liked the unexpected twist. Well done.

  16. draliman says:

    Two sets of twins torn apart – maybe the surviving twins can find comfort with each other.
    Nice twist(s), I didn’t see that coming.

  17. Dear Marie Gail,

    I’ve had my characters rewrite for me on so many occasions I should no longer be surprised when they do. Loved the “double entendre” Twins are fun to write about. Nice one.



  18. This was a surprising twist to the tale… loved the expactiation .. and what happened afterwards…

  19. Carrie says:

    loved the twist 🙂

  20. Nan Falkner says:

    I loved this story – it’s nice how they got to meet. I am a twin and the bond between twins is extremely strong. I hope they get together – they certainly have something in common. Great story! Thanks, Nan

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