Copyright 2013, Janet M. Webb
Friday Fictioneers for February 14, 2014
94 words
Lana squeezes around knots of conversationalists clogging the gallery. Unimpressed with the collection, she begins weaving her way to the exit when a portrait catches her eye.
Lana hasn’t looked at a single picture of her twin since Tara died. She wasn’t aware Tara had known the artist. Yet, from the canvas, her twin’s half-amused smile stares back.
“Lana! Finally, we meet.” Lana turns to see the artist standing behind her. “John’s twin,” he states, gesturing to the neighboring portrait. Lana had forgotten that two twins were killed in the car accident that night.
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A good story with an exceptional twist.
Thanks! 🙂
Marie,
that’s quite a twist, with double twins. What a way for them to meet. Hopefully, they can get to know each other better. 🙂
-David
Thanks, David. Not the ending I had planned, but the artist just jumped in, and there he was, twin and all. I figured I’d just go with it. 🙂
What a unique story…..is this leading to a romance? 🙂
That would be one way to go. I think I’ll let my reader decide. 🙂
the twin theme makes this story unique.
Thank you. They have followed me throughout my life, and I am married to one. Figured it was time to write a story about a fictitious set (or two).
MG
Oh a double twist!Original take and I loved it 🙂
Thank you.
🙂
Very clever. And very moving. One can imagine the turmoil she would be experiencing.
Yikes… and the body count gets higher!
Yeah, I had only planned to kill one, and then that other set of twins comes along and . . .
Off to write a story about a biathlon event gone wrong,
Marie Gail
I like your comment explaining hoe you wrote the ending. Often, our characters lead us through the story.
That particular gallery opening was brimming with possibilities. Thanks, Jan!
Marie Gail
this looks like a wonderful start to a new romance. 🙂 maybe in the end, their twins would be happy knowing that they had brought the two together. great story. 🙂
I love that two different readers have mentioned a budding romance. Originally, the first paragraph discussed a relationship my character was already in. After I nixed that part, I never thought about setting her up with the artist, but that’s the beauty of flash fiction. The details really are up to the reader. 🙂
A good story that was well-done. Good surprise ending!
Thanks! 🙂
loved this! Very good double-twin-twist that.
Thanks! 🙂
Interesting. A rare event described in a subtle and beautiful way.
-HA
Thanks so much, HA. I’m flattered.
MG
Must be fate–the fact that she even attended the show, then found the portrait of her sister, then finding out the artist is the twin of the other victim. Yes, there are certainly hints of something more to come. Good story..
Thanks!
Killer ending, literally. And the story just kept getting deeper and deeper and more twisted, holding my attention totally. Well done. Ron
Thank you! 🙂
So much for doing a Doublemint gum commercial together. I liked the unexpected twist. Well done.
Thank you! You made me laugh. Actually, that jingle was running through my head by the time I finished this story.
Marie Gail
Two sets of twins torn apart – maybe the surviving twins can find comfort with each other.
Nice twist(s), I didn’t see that coming.
Thank you. Actually, they surprised me too. Ornery characters just sneaked up behind me, and before I knew it . . . Well, that’s just how they are.
Cheers!
Marie Gail
Dear Marie Gail,
I’ve had my characters rewrite for me on so many occasions I should no longer be surprised when they do. Loved the “double entendre” Twins are fun to write about. Nice one.
shalom,
Rochelle
Double the fun! Glad you enjoyed it.
Cheers!
Marie Gail
This was a surprising twist to the tale… loved the expactiation .. and what happened afterwards…
Thanks! 🙂
loved the twist 🙂
Thank you!
I loved this story – it’s nice how they got to meet. I am a twin and the bond between twins is extremely strong. I hope they get together – they certainly have something in common. Great story! Thanks, Nan
Thanks, Nan. I’m glad the story rang true for a twin.
Marie Gail