Tree of Life


Friday Fictioneers for March 28.

The challenge: Write a 100-word story inspired by the photo prompt.

Play along by writing your own, reading others and/or commenting on the flashes we fictioneers create.

My piece weighs in this week at 96 words.

 

Copyright John Nixon

Copyright John Nixon

 

Tree of Life

Abigail found solace in the limbs of the olive tree. It became an audience for her deepest ponderings. As her grieving father became more distant, Abigail and the tree became closer. She used to wonder if this were the same olive tree that gave hope to Noah after the Great Flood.

Abigail absently caresses the branches of her tree. A pang across her midsection yanks her from reverie. She catches her breath, leans against the tree for support. She wonders if it will be a father to her child as it was a mother to her.

Advertisements

28 thoughts on “Tree of Life

  1. elappleby says:

    Love the change of tense in the second paragraph. Nicely done 🙂

  2. Marie, what a unique POV. 🙂

    janet

    • storydivamg says:

      Thank you, Janet. There was originally a whole lot more to the story I had in my head, but I think the 100-word limit did me a favor this time around.

      Cheers!
      MG

  3. MG – I would like to hear the rest of your story here. Is this King David’s Abigail?

    • storydivamg says:

      Just an Abigail . . . any Abigail. 🙂 King David’s Abigail is an interesting historical character, though, about whom we aren’t given a whole lot of information in Scripture. Was she a wise and godly woman or a shrewd betrayer who lusted after the rogue, good-looking warrior, David? Perhaps there is another story there, although I think it’s more likely to be novel-length than to be a flash.

      Thanks for your interest.

      Marie Gail

  4. Nan Falkner says:

    Great story Marie Gail! I really like this point of view! Thanks for the read! Nan 🙂

  5. Liz Young says:

    Lovely story – I hope she’s safe giving birth in the woods.

    • storydivamg says:

      I imagine her home is just a few yards up the hill. 🙂 That part got cut in an edit when I pared the story to fit the 100-word limit.

      Thanks for reading.

      MG

  6. An incredible moment you’ve captured — somehow giving a rich history and an uncertain future all in 96 words. Well done.

  7. K.Z. says:

    wonderful story, Marie Gail. i’m glad that she found hope and comfort from the tree, if not from others.

    • storydivamg says:

      Thank you, KZ. I imagine that many lonely little girls make friends with the trees. Having grown up in Kansas, I was stuck making friends with blades of prairie grass which is considerably more difficult.

      Cheers!
      MG

  8. atrm61 says:

    Poor girl-she is in a real bad shape-wonder who the father of that child is?A great story Marie-very moving,to think that a girl has no friends and tries to find solace from a tree-sad!

  9. Dear Marie Gail,

    Story weighs in at 96. Baby weighs in at 7lbs. 8 oz.? You’ve captured her loneliness well. No doubt it was her loneliness and search for affection that got her into this predicament in the first place. A different POV. Nice read.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • storydivamg says:

      Thanks, Rochelle. One of my favorite things about composing such short stories is hearing the many conclusions that readers come to upon reading. This story lends itself to those multiple conclusions in ways I hadn’t considered–partly because of portions that were cut along the way.

      Is she an unwed mother? Is she a widow? Does she even know the father? Is the father in the picture at all?

      What I love the most is that I “knew” the answers to all of these questions when I wrote this and now my wonderful readers have a variety of different answers to these same questions.

      Yes, I am addicted.

      Peace,
      Marie Gail

  10. camgal says:

    Birth is a beautiful thing 🙂

  11. Sarah Ann says:

    Love the idea of tree as audience for her ponderings, and so much more. The understated emotion in this leaves one thinking and wondering long after the reading is over.

  12. VictoriaJoDean says:

    The second paragraph yanked me to a different place than just observing a girl and a tree. Good job, Marie Gail.

    • storydivamg says:

      Thanks so much, Vicky. I enjoyed writing this one. There were several details that got cut in the process of trimming it to the 100-word limit. I’m glad the final product works for you.

      All my best,
      Marie Gail

Comments, compliments and constructive criticism are always welcome.

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s