Evolution


This is my response to the Friday Fictioneers prompt for December 12. The challenge is to write a 100-word story inspired by the photo prompt. Play along by writing your own, reading others and/or commenting on the flashes we fictioneers create. The photo prompt this week comes from Sandra Crook.  My piece this week weighs in at 99 words.

Copyright Sandra Crook

Copyright Sandra Crook

Evolution

Everything changes over time. Given enough time, the changes can be radical.

These thoughts drift through Sonora’s mind as she steps from her cliff-side dwelling to view the rising water. Large rodents, descendants of something her great grandmother called a “beaver,” were building downstream. The beavers had used felled trees to create dams. These new creatures use bits of plastic, rocks, and metal as well as scraps of wood.

A thin cry coaxes Sonora back into her home. She bends over the cradle, caresses her baby’s face. Picking him up, she admires the three violet eyes blinking at her.

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42 thoughts on “Evolution

  1. That’s spooky! But all those chemicals we dump could certainly make it happen.

  2. Elizabeth says:

    LOL, three eyes? not surprise, with all these chemicals being dumped in the water everyday.

    • storydivamg says:

      I’m not enough of a scientist to explain the exact reason for that specific mutation. Perhaps it was chemical. Perhaps there was a need to be more observant due to vicious predators. Who knows?

      Thanks for reading.

      Marie Gail

  3. Dear Marie Gail,

    Violet’s a nice color. 😉 I wonder when humans developed a third eye.

    Very well imagined. I guess even beavers had to adapt. Fun, if not disturbing, story.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  4. “were building a downstream.” Oops – might want to revisit this sentence.
    Well, this is creepy. Kudos!

  5. The future you’ve created is prophetic – the beavers using our durable rubbish, water levels rising. The way you’ve built the future made even three eyes seem plausible. I worry for the future of the child, though. Who knows what this world will produce next. Good one, Marie Gail.

  6. Horus says:

    Beavers are the first thing that came to my mind with this photo-prompt too ! But then how you perceived is totally unique. A totally rad presentation there Marie !

  7. This one gave me chills, Marie Gail. Vivid and dynamic in the telling, and a future that seems possible.

  8. Sandra says:

    You had me read this twice to fully appreciate it. The ‘three violet eyes’ was pure poetry.

  9. I think that I could grow to appreciate mutations.. three violet eyes sounds better than big water rodent for sure.. chemicals and radiation have a great deal to answer for.

    • storydivamg says:

      “Mutation” is really just a nasty word for “adaptation,” and adaptation can be a very good thing. As for the violet eyes, I agree they sound better than large aquatic rodents.

      Thanks for reading and commenting.

      All my best,
      Marie Gail

  10. AnElephant likes this.
    And wonders if, next week, you can give him two trunks?

    • storydivamg says:

      Wow! Next week? That’s a pretty tall order. Evolution generally goes much more slowly than that. However, we may be able to put AnElephant into an environment that will force either him or his offspring to develop a third nostril in order to breathe. Are you up for that experiment? 😉

      Cheers!
      Marie Gail

  11. We’re moving fast from a dream of the past to a brave new world. And a scary one indeed. Nice job!

  12. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Marie,

    This was eerie and oh, so good. It sneaks up on you and then hits you over the head with three violet eyes. Excellent work.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  13. Nan Falkner says:

    Good job Marie Gail! Scary to think of what may happen in the future. It’s true everything changes over time. Nan 🙂

  14. Nice one. Now when he grows up the kids at school can call him “6-eyes” instead of “4-eyes” if he ends up needing glasses.

    Randy

  15. Wow didn’t see that ending coming Nice! 🙂

  16. Marie Gail, I guess if you’re used to it, three eyes could be handy. I’ve read that Elizabeth Taylor had violet eyes and two sets of eyelashes. At least that’s what someone wrote about her. I also read that polar bears are starting to be born brown. Things evolve. Good and well-written story. 🙂 — Susan

    • storydivamg says:

      Thanks for reading and commenting this week, Susan. Those changes are inevitable. I’ve been amused to watch the way people refer to them. Are they mutation or are they evolution? Perhaps it depends solely on your POV.

      All my best,
      Marie Gail

    • storydivamg says:

      Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, Susan.

      It’s been fun this week seeing who uses the word “mutation” and who uses “evolution.” Changes can come into either category. Changes in the environment–both good and bad–are often the precursors of both evolution and mutation. May we all continue to evolve for the better.

      All my best,
      Marie Gail

  17. Margaret says:

    Quite a surprising twist at the end. I like the narrator’s point of view – watching the animals at work. One thing intrigued me – is the cliffside dwelling a cave? I’m getting images of overpopulation and technological decline here. Am I reading too much into it?

    • storydivamg says:

      Margaret,
      Not at all. Thanks so much for picking up on those cues. I was beginning to think that perhaps I had been a little to subtle in the story, but you have read exactly what I meant to write. So glad to have you along for the ride.

      All my best,
      Marie Gail

  18. Oh boy! How things change and stay the same.

  19. Sarah Ann says:

    What does he need the third eye for? And I hope this is evolution and not mutation through pollution? Really enjoyed where you took us this week.

  20. […] First, an author’s note: This story is the continuation of a Friday Fictioneers response I wrote back in December. The two stories stand alone, but you can read the other by clicking here. […]

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