Interview with a Police Chief


First, please allow me to apologize to any readers who are feeling neglected these days. I’m working extra hard these days and have been short on time and energy. Thanks for coming along to read and comment. I appreciate you, and I promise I’ll be back mingling soon.

Now, it is time for Friday Fictioneers, and most of you know the drill. Write a 100-word story based on the photo prompt. Then join the rest of us by reading and sharing your thoughts. This week’s photo comes from the inimitable Jennifer Pendergast of Elmo Writes.

Copyright Jennifer Pendergast

Copyright Jennifer Pendergast

Author’s note: It’s been a while since we’ve caught up with Lauren Shrecklich, and today she’s meeting another of my characters for the first time. I think you can enjoy this story on it’s own merit, but feel free to follow the links to read related stories.

 Interview with a Police Chief

Darkness enveloped the small Missouri town as Lauren turned south on Railroad St. She pulled up to the trailer home, and her cell phone rang.

“You found the place.”

“Yes.”

“Ben is not your mark.”

“But isn’t he . . .”

“A vampire? Yes, but he’s working with us. He’s been successful in eliminating several sexual predators, and I have reason to believe he has other insights to share.”

Lauren disconnected the call.

The trailer door opened before she knocked.

Agent Schrecklich.”

Lauren gasped, recognizing the face of Maryville’s former police chief—the one recently killed in the line of duty.

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49 thoughts on “Interview with a Police Chief

  1. It works well on its own Marie Gail, I love the feel of the small town with its dark and supernatural elements

    • storydivamg says:

      Thanks, Siobhan. I hadn’t planned on doing more than a couple flash fiction stories about either Lauren or Ben, but they seem to be growing on me. I’m working hard to create a collection of short stories that will both stand along and hold together as a longer work.

      All my best,
      Marie Gail

  2. Sandra says:

    That’s good. Seriously draws the reader in. Great idea – well done

    • storydivamg says:

      Thanks, Sandra. It had been far too long since I wrote about these characters, and I rather like all three of them–including that disembodied voice over the cell phone.

      All my best,
      MG

  3. gahlearner says:

    This is exciting. I wonder how they’ll get along. You create a great atmosphere.

  4. elmowrites says:

    Definitely works on its own; great feel for the set-up and character and a nice bit of intrigue at the end. Thanks for the link, I shall endeavour to live up to the epithet inimitable too!

  5. It works just dandy on its own.

    • storydivamg says:

      I’m always glad to hear that, Alicia. It’s important to me that each of these flashes remain a story within itself as well as a part of the larger story. Kind of a writing experiment, I guess. Readers definitely come away with a different experience based on how many of the other, connected flashes they have read. My biggest concern is making sure that all (or as many as possible) of the readers enjoy the read.

      All my best,
      Marie Gail

  6. Francesca Smith says:

    This drew me in straight away. I like how you described the darkness drawing in too!

  7. MG,
    It seems that lots of people are apologizing for being busy these days. I am in the same boat: the last few weeks I haven’t had the time to read many at all.
    I like the ending. It looks like Ben has been busy. This should shake things up in the little Missouri town. 🙂
    -David

    • storydivamg says:

      Maryville and the surrounding area are some of my favorite places to visit. I hesitated to bring the Shrecklich saga here as she is based in Boston, but I’m going with the “write what you know” bit of writing advice. I’ll get her back to the East Coast soon enough.

      As to being busy, I suppose it’s just one of those things that happens sometimes. I’ve been rather negligent in reading other bloggers for the past three weeks, so it seemed like the right time to address the issue.

      Have a great week!

      MG

  8. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear Marie Gail, Super story and it is scary! Nan 🙂

    • storydivamg says:

      Thanks, Nan. I think we will ultimately find that the powers Ben is fighting are far more frightening than he is–even though he is one of the undead.

      MG

  9. Mike says:

    What a great plot developing. I want to read the book!

    • storydivamg says:

      Aww . . . geez. Thanks! I’m flattered! If you want to read more about these characters, click on the word “vampire” or one of the character names in the word salad along the right side of the blog.

      All my best,
      MG

  10. Ellespeth says:

    Oh well…it certainly can’t end here. It can, of course. I hope it doesn’t.
    Ellespeth

  11. draliman says:

    Face to face with a dead guy! The plot thickens. You could definitely get a novel out of these stories.

  12. Dear Marie Gail,

    Few vampire stories spark my interest. You, my dear, have exceeded them all. I’m guessing the former officer isn’t there to take a bite out of crime. 😉

    Perhaps we’ll be meet again for lunch sometime soon in the midst of our businesses. Meanwhile, I’m happy for both of us.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • storydivamg says:

      Dearest Rochelle,
      I am flattered. Since I know you’ve read the Anne Rice novel that inspired this week’s title, I’m exceptionally pleased.

      And, yes, we shall meet for lunch in the future–hopefully the near future.

      Love and hugs,
      MG

  13. JKBradley says:

    I like where this is going.

  14. Strange occurrences in the Midwest. I like it.
    Tracey

  15. rgayer55 says:

    Vampire in a trailer, huh? Drinking blood from a PBR can I suspect. 🙂
    An interesting twist. I love it, MG.

    • storydivamg says:

      heh heh. That’s one take on it, Russell. Leave it to the guy from Arkansas to come up with that spin. Glad you enjoyed this one. I hadn’t exactly planned on sticking Ben in a trailer, but that’s what Google maps shows on Railroad St. in Maryville, MO.

      Cheers!
      MG

  16. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Marie Gail,

    You probably know that I don’t, as a rule, usually enjoy Vampire stories. Most are trite and unimaginative and cliche ridden. Interview with a Police Chief is exactly the opposite and made for good reading. You never tried to shock or force feed us gore or any other of the overworked attributes of the genre. I think the pacing was perfect and the plot was interesting and that the entire piece lends itself well to a larger work. Very nicely rendered.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  17. afairymind says:

    This works really well on its own but I also enjoyed reading the other stories about Ben. It’s an interesting set-up and i look forward to reading more. 🙂

  18. Wow! MG– whoa! Suspense, terror, chills and intrigue… and a story with layers; you really nailed this one! And you got yours in first this week! That means you’re working hard and not sleeping enough either. 😉

    • storydivamg says:

      Thanks so much, Dawn. As it happens, I just fired a Fortune 1000 client. I might be getting more sleep soon, or I might just be working harder for less money. LOL At least my blog readers are making this gig rewarding as well as fun.

  19. Dee says:

    This is good and, as others have already said, stands perfectly well on its own. Well done.

  20. Gripping. I like the voice on the other end of the phone giving us the background – clever.

  21. erinleary says:

    You have taken what could be an overdone concept and made it gripping and compelling. Nicely done!

    • storydivamg says:

      Thanks, Erin. I personally have enjoyed only a select few vampire stories, so it surprised me when all these started flowing from my pen. It’s always nice to hear that my readers are enjoying the results.

  22. Very eerie, MG, I’m ready for more!

  23. Good story, Marie Gail. I would suspect a vampire if someone came back from the dead. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne

  24. […] with my Lauren Shrecklich saga, so please bear with me. Let’s join her as she stands outside the trailer of Maryville’s former chief-of-police. (Although this portion of the story should be able to stand on it’s own, you can click the […]

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